Obama's Revised Speech

After looking at all of the corrections that Obama made to his speech, I think that it is neat to see someone with such high power still make mistakes on a paper just like everyone else. One of the biggest changes that I noticed he made was to address certain people. I think that is very important when you are writing such a powerful speech because you want everyone to be recognized equally. The problem arises when you leave one person or one party out, then that person or party is going to think that they less than another person or party. Another change that I thought was very significant was the first line that I read. Obama replaces “him” with “Teddy”. I believe that this is very important because after the death of Ted Kennedy, it is only respectful to address him appropriately. Using his name is way more significant than just saying “him”.