Obama's revisions

In Obama's revisions there were some that changed the way the audience felt on the essay and there werre others that were much more suttle in changing the meaning. In the fourth paragraph he adds "over half of our seniors could not support themselves and millions had seen their savings wiped away". I believe that he adds this just to get an emotional response out of the audience. It helps the audience visually understand what is going on better than when he just says in 1935, because some people may have not known what specific event happened on this particular day. In paragraph 6 he adds " I know that" by saying this it makes it known that he is aware of the issue instead of stating the issue. This makes the public more aware to the importance of what he is getting at. Also i find it funny in addition 2 at the bottom he restates "and an acknowledgment that sometimes government has to step in to help deliver on that promise. ". This shows that he didnt want to put full responsibility on the government because the original version left out the sometimes part.