Why Make the Changes?

I believe that Obama made changes to "our National Story" because he wanted the speech to reflect his own personal emotions. He may have felt, by reading over it, that the speech did not sound right and wanted to revise it. By adding and omitting some of the words that he did, I feel that it does sound better. Not only does it sound better, but it makes me feel like he cares enough to revise a speech probably written by someone else. I like that he named specific people like "Teddy" as well as certain groups of people. He got more personal with the speech therefore, the impact on the audience would be much greater. He added phrases like "I know that..." this to me signifies that Obama is aware of topics that need addressed, and that he is willing to take the time to fix them. By saying "I" it feels more powerful in a speech rather then saying "my team and I." Overall, the seepch seems more thought out and personal.