SPEECHedit -- JK

Honestly what I see that was changed seemed like he just wanted to be on a more personal level. Or that's how he wanted to appear. By adding "we","us", and "our" it makes it seem like he thinks he is one of us. Since people think of him as a celebrity I think it can be hard for people to believe that he wants to help the country. By using these certain words it makes it seems like his concern is just as great as ours.

When composing a speech you really have to make it based on your target audience. Based on these changes he's made I think that he just thinks the speech would be more effective with certain pronouns and active verbs. With active verbs comes the notion that things may actually get done or things are being done. By putting them into a speech definitely might make people feel better about the situation at hand.